Smashallsmurfs
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Well F*ck me
https://ryanfcramer2.wixsite.com/notahero-short-story For those who would look. Keep in mind it's only a chapter right now.
Mar 29, 2018 1:01 AM
Smashallsmurfs
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https://ryanfcramer2.wixsite.com/notahero-short-story For those who would look. Keep in mind it's only a chapter right now.
Cotcan
Are you in a writer's group op? If so, you can ask them to read through it.
ExpectedDickbuttGotDickbutt
*Couldn't care less.
IcouldntfindmymedsthismorningsoItookyours
Or.... just post it
Zombierilla
I’ll be willing to read and give critique. DM me and I’ll help you out.
stupidfuntime
Send it over my way!
RubberChickenTenders
So post it. We'll read. BTW if your friends don't like to read you need new friends.
Totallyscrewedinaustin
I'd just be happy with the "friends" part...
onlywisehermit
I read. I'll read it.
Siptro
if only there was some way to get it out for a large group of people to see it and comment about it. Damn
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Siptro
there is dozen of sites and forums for that kind of thing. Reddit has a few threads with thousands of subs
DocGigglez
What is it about?
ChickenChickenBurningBright
I read it. What you have is a an outline of a story, but it's not an interesting story as is. It could be with a lot of work. To get
ChickenChickenBurningBright
from your first sentence to the last should probably take about 30 pages to setup characters and environment before you spring the reveal.
ChickenChickenBurningBright
Biggest problem is the entire thing is a monologue telling what happened in the past, and that's dull. Tell the story in real time through
ChickenChickenBurningBright
dialog and character interactions. read here: https://thewritepractice.com/show-dont-tell/
Smashallsmurfs
Appreciate any and all criticism. Only a chapter of the story. I put it on a blog for all to read.. do blogs work? See BIO for link.
skysailor93
I got you
supercalifragilisticexpealidocious15
I'm in.
LoveYourBodyLarry
Too hard. Link here or it won't get read.
frog311
Hey, for your book, kind of need more then one chapter. And maybe add a description of the books somewhere on the imgur post. 1/2
frog311
And maybe to get some more coverage consider posting to websites like royal road, 2/2
Smashallsmurfs
Apprciate the suggestion, though keep in mind it’s a short story and I didn’t post the whole thing as I was nervous how it would be received