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My sister is 13 years old, she wrote this for an english project, the last line made me feel...
Sep 3, 2013 10:30 PM
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everynameiwantisgone
favourited for future feels.
shanaynerz
Love this. Reminds me of myself at 13. I loved to write, and I'm trying to reignite that fire I had. Keep encouraging her!
LadyNetrex
Wow..
JanayLiz10
she was phone
hyperchondriac
If April was killed the day before her wedding, who was Mr. Harris' wife?
ilikepixels
http://imgur.com/eldksT3
mrmcspicy
she was phone
PenisApologies
Poor Mr. Harris! Fuck you Ben!
ImGoingToGoFallAsleepOnABench
*possessions. Regardless, your sister has literary talent. A lot of it.
mattyb93
Yeah, that was my bad, she wrote it on paper but you couldn't read it from a photo, so I typed it up.
wratten17
I hope this is real your sister has real talent
Harcorepkurharcoreprkur
This needs more upvotes. Kudos for healthy skepticism.
wratten17
Only way to be bro just don't get carried away and be naive
geminifaerie
If this gets lost in oblivion, I want to thank you for posting this. The stories people carry.
RireMakar
It made it to most viral~!
JesseSavige
Excellently written. The moral of this story is something most people don't seem to understand. :(
MC182
People who are cold and bitter once loved more then most people can understand.
mattyb93
Update: Wow! My sister was shocked from imgurs response and has agreed to write this as a short story then allow me to upload it. 1/2
mattyb93
2/2 she can be credited as Sophia B. I want to thank you all for helping my sister gain the confidence to follow her dream. Thanks all :)
caniszephyr
can I keep this quote please?
SerialKitten666
I've heard the quote before actually.
mattyb93
Well, it's on the internet now. She said I could imgur it so I guess so.
TheMonsterWithinYou
At least give us a .... writers name? so Credit can be given to where it's due? It doesn't have to be her real name. Could also be an alias
s1yb00ts
+1 if you only read the bottom 2 lines suggested by the title
Forbayn
This is a different post when you can hear "Mad World" playing from another room. +1
jferrante831
put the song on and reread. came extremely close to crying. that song almost gets me on its own. too much...
silverspooner
Damn OP. Your sister has mad skills. If she can write this at the age of 13 imagine what she could write in the future.
Snooj
Then what does it mean? Does it mean the rent is cheaper in a world of darkness? The commute is shorter? It's waterfront? What???
rustuschrist
semi-colons should be used a little more sparingly but christ, grown men don't know how to use them either. damn good job!
donchaknoowww
Dem chills
Telumehtar93
Holy crap. Am I the only one having goosebumps of that? Please encourage her sister to continue.
PeePeeFrictionPleasure
Can... can I borrow that quote? It's too beautiful man... :(
themojojojo
Deep. Your sister's got some skills.
SerialKitten666
She's got decent content, poor writing skills though...
SintaxxError
Yep. Skills indeed. At this age I was just happy using the "5 sentences is equal to a paragraph" excuse to get over writing assignments.
IamANewt
omg memories.
Pharya
That's the sort of sentence I didn't expect to laugh at given the sad context, but... I guess I'm incredibly immature.
Tighe
Holy shit im crying
tracereading
Your sister needs a proofreader.
TheBridgeburners
She's 13...
tracereading
That's not really an excuse, you know.
ObviousCaptain
Read "darkness" as "dankness" at first.... caused some confusion.
cnllnn
[To: Peter][ From: Uncle Ben ] ;'/
DonyaCratch19
Best thing I read all day! +1
DeadyBearr
Wait... Wife killed day before wedding. Marriage before weddings aren't unheard of but that sounds weird. Great story otherwise! Keep at it.
strangethingsafoot
Yeah, I had to read that three times because of this. It confused me. Wife got murdered before wedding day? You mean fiancé, hopefully.
harveyandharley
Some people consider themselves married in their hearts before they are legally married, because they know they're mates for life.
DranksAndDragons
That was what got me too. I couldn't be sad because I was too confused. Now I'm sad that I wasn't as sad. =(
SquirrellyWhirly
Wow, good catch. I was too busy trying not to cry to notice.
DeadyBearr
I used to write stories riddled with allegories so I pick up on these things while reading.
infinityfire
Change "April, his beloved wife..." to "April, his beloved fiancee..." and it works.
DeadyBearr
Exactly.
Laimbrane
To me, that's evidence that this is legitimately the work of a 13-year-old.
Laimbrane
I mean that as a good thing, btw.
CindyWho4
Not sure why you're getting downvoted. I agree. Made me think of a kid's rough first go or something.
mattyb93
Apparently my sister wrote some previous pages to this before which explain about the wife thing apparently bens grandad is a bit loopy 1/2
RoboticSmurf
Ask her to keep writing, this is good stuff. Some people loose their depth when they get older, I hope this is not the case for her!
jaskey
I need the rest of this story.
IWantALLtheAnimals
I thought of it as, though they were never actually able to get married, he forever referred to her as his wife, just as they had intended.
goats3cks
I hate books but I would love to read more of this.
Trakkah
Wow you must have read some terrible books to have that kind of view O.o
GrowliePants
I'm not going to downvote you for hating books, but you are the very first person I've ever come across that said, 'I hate books'.
MichaelJordanAsHimselfInSpaceJam
I feel so sorry for you.
goats3cks
don't be, I'm doing quite well for myself.
mattyb93
2/2 And it explains he always tells story's but forgets and adds details. Apparently it was meant to be comic relief from the dark story.
idontevencare
wait. this is supposed to be -comedic relief-? hot damn. also- verb tense and punctuation, but those things come with practice. (1/2)
idontevencare
(2/2) as someone who was told to never stop writing, and has since stopped writing, dont let her talent go by unused. we need more authors.
F0rger
Wow, she's talented. I love her use of vocabulary, it reminds me of my own and I'm 22. The only critique I'd have is her characters are (1)
F0rger
really verbose, which is something I always get yelled at for. That's something so minor compared to her talent, though. (2)
ginangu
Tell her she is famous on imgur, we want more.
shaftinferno
Tell your sister, from one writer (to toot my horn, published!) to another writer: just keep writing. She's got the talent. (1/3)
shaftinferno
Remember, less is more. There's a lot unsaid here, and that works. Leave the audience captivated and wanting more. Tell her to (2/3)
shaftinferno
keep writing. She'll soon find herself winning the world over. Some writing falls on deaf ears, but hers stands out. I'd love to read more.
Newport89
I sincerely agree. Short stories are sometimes the greatest stories.
RoboticSmurf
"Less is more" said the guy in three linked comments! ;)
Darcyeti
i hope you encourage your sister in continueing writing, she obviously has talent. and very deep thoughts for a 13 year old. thumps up
colourblindchameleon
continueing?
Suckdeeznuts
The grammar nazi within me holds back the upvote, as true as this is
BugJuiceComesFromWhoYouAre
Thumps like a truck, truck, truck. Baby move your butt, butt, butt.
WhitePeppercorn
fuck 'em, plus 1 for thumps!
HenryGR
I was going to point out how talented the author is, so I upvoted you instead because it is basically what you wrote. Except for the thumps.
thekeeb
And continueing.
LordeLordeLordeYaYaYa
My lovely lady thumps
Zularing
this should have more upvotes
Daycent
I laughed a lot and now my tummy hurts ... +1
ThatBarbieBoy
Best thing I read all day! +1
MarzEz
Is no-one going to mention "Continueing"? Still, it's not the comment author's talent we're discussing.
Newport89
I didn't even notice that over all the thumps!
Darcyeti
english isn't my first language, so sometimes their can be "tiny accidents" sneeking in my writing ;)
ItsNotJustAnyBoulderITSAROCK
thumps?
colourblindchameleon
continueing?
shittybill
Thumps up. Can't you read?
schmeeglee
Thumps...thumb stumps. Hasn't been the same since the accident.
RespectedProfessional
My thumps, my thumps, my lovely lady thumps.
J2383
SHE'S 13 YOU SICK BASTARDS!
babypolk
Humps* pedobear approves
MyPalmsSpaghettiKneesWeakArmsSpaghettiTheresVomitOnMySpaghetti
Clumps*
Amtherion
Dumps*